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Unaware

Isolation quickly overwhelms me Begging for forgiveness, a fallen hand Desolation I now begin to see Hanging by a thin thread, a single strand I watch them… Their fears, their misbehavior Mistreat, abuse…. Completely unaware I am the land, their glorious savior Someday they will learn to treat me with care I wish they would learn to trust each other To join as one, to stand strong together A bond, a band and a mighty brother Forever as one, a powerful tether You may not know, that fear is their captor So you may not see each special factor  

One Reply to “Unaware”

  1. I really love the vibe behind this piece! Well, more specifically I love the way you expressed this piece. It’s certainly provocative, thought provoking.
    Helpful critique: Don’t forget to double check your grammer, the capitalization and the way each stanza joins or departs.
    If the ‘poem’ looks more aesthetically pleasing to the eye, for some people, it will be even more pleasing to the ear.

    Thanks for sharing! You’re V talented.
    -LVX

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